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I've always the quite one. The weirdo you've never notice but scence I've learn how to focus. I've realize why I shut myself up. I have too big of a mouth and too much love to burn out. I've seen it all before. I guess I was that girl. So what if I just sat quietly and not speak to anyone who approached me. you'd never notice the pain behind that smile. It's burned out….burned out. Crowed my head again. All I can do is hurt over and over. I'm hurting u, myself and him. la la la la la la la. This morning I told myself I could change but all I ever do if screw it up. Maybe this time, oh wait today but I can't I have failed u again and again. I just can't shut my big mouth. Words come out like knifes that scar u and leave you with the pain of guilty lies. I'm drowning in blood. Too much emotions going through my heart. Pain, love, guilt… and lots of other things. Too much overwhelming me. I'll be the girl who cries herself to sleep at night rethinking these memories. I've always been the hyper one, with a smile and I wanted to change this sad place but all I've done is made it worse!!!!!!!!!.
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:icon52hertzwhale:
52HertzWhale Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012
The grammar and spelling is pathetic. Go to school. And if you're under thirteen, get off of DeviantART.
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GurRaeye Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Excuse me! Who gives you the right to go ahead and just trash someone like that!? Not everyone is just so "perfect," ya know!
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52HertzWhale Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012
I'm not trashing anyone. What's the point of posting something if all you want is nice comments and praise? That's not how it is in the real world. People aren't simply going to be nice because you're sensitive. The sooner you can understand that, the better.
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TTflower97 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
omg for the last time im not asking for any praise -_-
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GurRaeye Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I actually really understand that. But not everything a person posts they want to have that kind of an answer. The way you put it, that was flat out rudeness.
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52HertzWhale Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
If all one can look at is the TONE of the words and not the message, then they have different problems. Once you can learn to take information out of things and recognize your faults, you'll be MUCH better off.
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GurRaeye Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I wasn't talking just about the tone, those words you chose, they were not the best of words to choose if you wanted to be kind in your criticism.
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52HertzWhale Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
The words I chose make up the tone. Criticism isn't about being kind. At all. Criticism is about showing someone what they've done wrong and what they need to do to make it better.
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TTflower97 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
UR NOT CRITICIZING UR INSULTING! <_< FINAL STATEMENT.
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TTflower97 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
all im'a say is i'm not looking for praise nor do i care and ik what criticize is all all that jazz u were saying i just dont like the u need to go back to school and stuff. hey I'm only human so yeah i have feelings. and I did look at the message and stuff and yea i understand and ur not the only one who commented on the grammar but urs was the only one that bothered me like if ur going a criticize cool but don't be rude about it. that's not cool. man this is stupid i wrote this like a month ago and typed super fast so it had a lot of typos and its just a poem so i don't believe this situation is that serious that u have to insult me. there's a difference between criticize and insults hunny.
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GurRaeye Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
And if you are doing as such, do you really need to mention that the person needs to go back to school to learn grammar? What if they had a valid reason? You should also take into consideration the other person's point of view as well. Maybe is you choose those kinds of words you can really irritate them.
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TTflower97 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012
look don't complain first off i didn't get to edit my poems so shut up and i'm 15 and i honestly don't care. if u wanna get smart with me then i advise that you go find someone else to criticize cause i'm not down for that. [link]
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52HertzWhale Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012
If you only want praise, you should keep this off Deviantart. Even if you didn't edit, you should know the basic skills of grammar and English. You posted this for others to see, so you have no right to tell them not to complain if they don't like it.
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TTflower97 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012
man u people smh -_- u people erk me.
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52HertzWhale Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012
I'll take that seriously when you can spell "irk."
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TTflower97 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
WOW! IRK!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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TTflower97 Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012
ok srry i typed it fast and i was uploading a lot at one time so i could show i friend ok my mistake and i know grammar thank u. u can give ur criticisium i just don't want u to be ignorant about it. i didn't say i only wanted praise i could care less i just don't like ur disrespect.-_-
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52HertzWhale Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012
I'm not being ignorant at all. And even if you didn't check it over you should at least know basic capitalization and grammar skills before presenting this to the public. A few errors are understandable, but this is not okay.
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TTflower97 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
PUT YOURSELF IN MY PLACE HOW WOULD YOU LIKE IT IF SOMEONE TOLD YOU TO GO BACK TO SCHOOL IM SURE YOU'D BE JUST AS UPSET HUNNY
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TTflower97 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012
LOOK THE ONLY REASON ITS LIKE THIS IS BECAUSE I TYPED THIS A WEEK AGO AND REALLY FAST AND I DIDNT LOOK IT OVER. MY MISTAKE.
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Demonwithinme Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
You can always re-read your work before posting. If you are 15, spell and use grammar, like a 15 year old should. You brought this on yourself by posting unchecked, 'raw' work like this.
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TTflower97 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012
well sorry my gosh but you guys dont have to be mean about it -_-
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TTflower97 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012
man im about to just delete this :(
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Demonwithinme Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
Don't delete it, just fix it up :p
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Diamondleepe Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012
Um, what?
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HideouslyDisfigured Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Student Filmographer
What the actual f.
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Nyar1athotep Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm going to believe that this is satire. Brilliantly done. :rofl:
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Demonwithinme Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
The grammar made me cry a little....
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TTflower97 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012
sorry :(
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Nyar1athotep Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Most touching thing about it.
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Demonwithinme Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
That amnesia Fluttershy. I like it :3
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Nyar1athotep Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Why, thank you! XD
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Pillowchook Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012
I agree... This would be a poetic masterpiece if it weren't for all the grammatical errors in it...
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TTflower97 Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012
wow i really should edit this stuff =.=
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Pillowchook Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012
XD All goods man, I still like it.
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SaintKelston Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012
Beautiful....
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cutelilaznpanda Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Student General Artist
is everything supposed to be mispelled and have grammar errors?
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RoninNeko Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Student General Artist
This was so beautiful I cried.

But seriously, why did 56 people favorite this? I'm confused.
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RoninNeko Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Student General Artist
If I might be a least a little serious, for a moment... Honey, it really might benefit you immensely to spell check your work before posting it online. It's hard for me to read this and take it seriously even if you intended it to be very emotional because I can't get past the typos and/or grammatical errors.
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ArtofDezzy Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012
beautiful!!!
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NeVassaEchoheart Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is great! Love the picture! :D
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